Friday, September 25, 2009

Sentence 1


Her sentence: "The blonde hair, the green eyes, the number...it's Glimmer."

From The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins.


The use of asyndeton emphasizes the list of familiar attributes that Katniss rapidly recognizes in her mutated enemy, resembling a stream of consciousness type of writing. The ellipsis builds suspense until the realization hits...the mutts are the fallen tributes.


My sentence: The ambulance, the blood, the shrieks...we're in trouble.

1 comment:

Lisa Huff said...

Superb analysis of what Collins is doing by structuring the sentence so. I like your own sentence too. Good work!